Madnis
[12] Conqueror
son. let me reiterate. I was not taking any shots at you. no guns were fired. I saw the video first on SRK. saw the thread here, glanced at what you said. paid it no mind. and posted my review. mainly because, i was at work when i wrote it. and it was right before i went to my daily. yes, I know you didn't know that. but now you do. the tekken bV thing was there so i can segway to shittin on harada for thumbs upping that piece of shit. notice the placement..
there you go. method. to the madness. if you thought i was taking a shot at you, i apologize. but no. i wasn't. if i was, i would take credit for it and continue to shit on you, not sit here and continually repeat, i'm not insulting you.
that said.
my reaction to your review... well.. you gave a paragraph and that was mainly based on the premise of the show. which. I liked. so... what now?
hmm? well, i guess i can go ahead and add my cents and scribble a plot idea.
well. first and foremost. I would introduce the character(s) of the show, and actually try to get you to care about them. I would introduce the main character with his job. showing you just how much he really needed it, and why losing it would lead up shit creek without a paddle. I would keep the gaming as a background thing in the beginning, give you hints to him being a competitive player at one point in his life, and contrast it to how he's gaming now. primarily for stress relief and a hobby. that way. when he loses his job, we can see him at his lowest point. and we know what he might do to assuage his anxiety. and then see him grow from there. I would show the struggle of finding a new job especially with his career. those points i added in how he can still make money? they're valid points so then giving a reasonable explanation as to why they're not working or how it fails all together will add to the drama. I would also accentuate and make clear his relationship with his son, as well as wife or exwife. the babysitter chick/friend/who the fuck is she? I wouldn't even put him in any tournament until maybe midseason or the season finale. I'm not looking at one story per show, i'm looking at the entire season, so i can pace the story in that time frame. and not like how they have it now:
we have no idea who any of these people are, and this is the pilot episode. not to mention, this thing is fast paced. we moved from one thing to another, and in all honesty. not much is really given except this is what's happening now.
anyway, within the first episode, i want you to know the main character, his motives, and rationale, as well as introduce the characters that affect his world directly. in this case, his wife, and son and chick friend. throughout the story, and throughout his various conflicts he deals with in life, I would gradually make way to show how competitive gaming would indeed seem like a viable reason, so we can suspend belief and go with it. So that would just be the first season. second season would deal with him actually living that life or trying to. having to travel. come up with money to travel. and then how that affects his relationships at home. with his son and his wife and the possibility of a love triangle? i don't know.. that's just one angle. and by the third season, i would bring it to a close. how this ends a chapter of his life, not his entire life. but how he was able to resolve the issues with his lifestyle and how he came out of it. and that's just one way this could have played out.
and if i'm working 8 minutes per episode, releasing every tuesday and thursday of this month. how many minutes is that?
72. that's an hour 30. that's a feature film. yes. i dare say that's pleanty of time to work a cohesive and compelling story out.
as for the wooden acting. that's solvable by creating situations on how these characters act and have them play off of each other. in other words. direct them. lo and behold we have someone in the industry named just for that. he's called "the director". if i can't do it. I find someone who can.
how were they wooden or overacting in certain points? well.. notice how they're delivering their lines. they were blurting em out, talking at a evenly paced and seemed unnatural at points. their postures and their movements were very stiff, awkward even in some scenes (specifically the dream sequence and introduction), and their expressions in their delivery... they were forcing it, and it was very noticeable. Didn't really seem like they were playing off one another so much as repeating memorized lines.
which adds to amateur hour, or college film school kid going for his grade. and I don't want to insult you, but I'm not sure if you actually know what a plot is. because you were describing the premise. and how real it is.. but the plot or what semblance it had wasn't really adhering to the usual pattern. and if it was, I couldn't discern it from one thing to another. I mean, break it down for me. help me understand the plot. Can you identify each plot point within that pilot? I mean everything was rushed and it was like: conflict? solution. where's the struggle? where's the climax? and I'm still lost on the relationships of these characters. I mean.. what do they mean to each other? none of it was actually established anywhere in that video, aside from father and son. will we get that insight in the future episodes? I would hope so. because leaving it as it is now. it's a complete mess.
if you say I'm taking it too seriously, I retort with why shouldn't i? if the person behind this took the time to make this. what was the reason for it, if not to show me what he/she can do? if they put their heart and soul into the making of it, why shouldn't i take it seriously?
I'll be damned if i throw out an animation and I put my all into it just for someone to say... don't take it too seriously. regardless of budget, if you put something out there. I'm going to do you the honor of treating it as I would any professional project and just as seriously.
as for your second post, I'm going to disregard it completely cause I honestly couldn't read it. you were being way too defensive there guy. for future reference, I am a hell of a troll. and a huge ass hole. and what you gave right there is gold. it was an open door. watch yourself bruh. because if i was in my I give no fucks mood. yeah.. i would be eatin well right now. very well.
as it is, let's hear your thoughts. since you thought the plot was so well done, help me understand it. won't change my feelings towards it, but at least i'll understand it. also, be so kind as to how you thought the acting was well done. Cause I honestly couldn't see it at all.
since we the only two in here. might as well talk about it.
also. where do you think this story will lead to?
i'm thinkin at some point we'll have a guest appearance of justin wong and have him lose to the main character, because.. he is.. The street fighter!
there you go. method. to the madness. if you thought i was taking a shot at you, i apologize. but no. i wasn't. if i was, i would take credit for it and continue to shit on you, not sit here and continually repeat, i'm not insulting you.
that said.
my reaction to your review... well.. you gave a paragraph and that was mainly based on the premise of the show. which. I liked. so... what now?
hmm? well, i guess i can go ahead and add my cents and scribble a plot idea.
well. first and foremost. I would introduce the character(s) of the show, and actually try to get you to care about them. I would introduce the main character with his job. showing you just how much he really needed it, and why losing it would lead up shit creek without a paddle. I would keep the gaming as a background thing in the beginning, give you hints to him being a competitive player at one point in his life, and contrast it to how he's gaming now. primarily for stress relief and a hobby. that way. when he loses his job, we can see him at his lowest point. and we know what he might do to assuage his anxiety. and then see him grow from there. I would show the struggle of finding a new job especially with his career. those points i added in how he can still make money? they're valid points so then giving a reasonable explanation as to why they're not working or how it fails all together will add to the drama. I would also accentuate and make clear his relationship with his son, as well as wife or exwife. the babysitter chick/friend/who the fuck is she? I wouldn't even put him in any tournament until maybe midseason or the season finale. I'm not looking at one story per show, i'm looking at the entire season, so i can pace the story in that time frame. and not like how they have it now:
we have no idea who any of these people are, and this is the pilot episode. not to mention, this thing is fast paced. we moved from one thing to another, and in all honesty. not much is really given except this is what's happening now.
anyway, within the first episode, i want you to know the main character, his motives, and rationale, as well as introduce the characters that affect his world directly. in this case, his wife, and son and chick friend. throughout the story, and throughout his various conflicts he deals with in life, I would gradually make way to show how competitive gaming would indeed seem like a viable reason, so we can suspend belief and go with it. So that would just be the first season. second season would deal with him actually living that life or trying to. having to travel. come up with money to travel. and then how that affects his relationships at home. with his son and his wife and the possibility of a love triangle? i don't know.. that's just one angle. and by the third season, i would bring it to a close. how this ends a chapter of his life, not his entire life. but how he was able to resolve the issues with his lifestyle and how he came out of it. and that's just one way this could have played out.
and if i'm working 8 minutes per episode, releasing every tuesday and thursday of this month. how many minutes is that?
72. that's an hour 30. that's a feature film. yes. i dare say that's pleanty of time to work a cohesive and compelling story out.
as for the wooden acting. that's solvable by creating situations on how these characters act and have them play off of each other. in other words. direct them. lo and behold we have someone in the industry named just for that. he's called "the director". if i can't do it. I find someone who can.
how were they wooden or overacting in certain points? well.. notice how they're delivering their lines. they were blurting em out, talking at a evenly paced and seemed unnatural at points. their postures and their movements were very stiff, awkward even in some scenes (specifically the dream sequence and introduction), and their expressions in their delivery... they were forcing it, and it was very noticeable. Didn't really seem like they were playing off one another so much as repeating memorized lines.
which adds to amateur hour, or college film school kid going for his grade. and I don't want to insult you, but I'm not sure if you actually know what a plot is. because you were describing the premise. and how real it is.. but the plot or what semblance it had wasn't really adhering to the usual pattern. and if it was, I couldn't discern it from one thing to another. I mean, break it down for me. help me understand the plot. Can you identify each plot point within that pilot? I mean everything was rushed and it was like: conflict? solution. where's the struggle? where's the climax? and I'm still lost on the relationships of these characters. I mean.. what do they mean to each other? none of it was actually established anywhere in that video, aside from father and son. will we get that insight in the future episodes? I would hope so. because leaving it as it is now. it's a complete mess.
if you say I'm taking it too seriously, I retort with why shouldn't i? if the person behind this took the time to make this. what was the reason for it, if not to show me what he/she can do? if they put their heart and soul into the making of it, why shouldn't i take it seriously?
I'll be damned if i throw out an animation and I put my all into it just for someone to say... don't take it too seriously. regardless of budget, if you put something out there. I'm going to do you the honor of treating it as I would any professional project and just as seriously.
as for your second post, I'm going to disregard it completely cause I honestly couldn't read it. you were being way too defensive there guy. for future reference, I am a hell of a troll. and a huge ass hole. and what you gave right there is gold. it was an open door. watch yourself bruh. because if i was in my I give no fucks mood. yeah.. i would be eatin well right now. very well.
as it is, let's hear your thoughts. since you thought the plot was so well done, help me understand it. won't change my feelings towards it, but at least i'll understand it. also, be so kind as to how you thought the acting was well done. Cause I honestly couldn't see it at all.
since we the only two in here. might as well talk about it.
also. where do you think this story will lead to?
i'm thinkin at some point we'll have a guest appearance of justin wong and have him lose to the main character, because.. he is.. The street fighter!
