8wayrun's poetry block

[Ghengis_John]

Not bad but not great. The flow needs work. Not that I'm an expert. It just sounded rough. It needs refining. Just as as for instance here:
Sensitive Edward Scissorhands is in coherts with the devil
They revel when you increase your anxious levels

I'd have said if you asked me to play editor:
Sensitive Edward Scissorhands is in cohorts with the devil
They revel when you increase your anxiety levels

Not only is anxiety a more a suitable word, I think the extra syllable has a better feel to it.

 

[CrazyYoshimitsu]

Poems aren't for me. I'll stick to what made me liek writing in the first place.

P.S.

I wirte fanfics now for those who didn't know.

 

[Psylocide]

P.S.

I wirte fanfics now for those who didn't know.

:)

 

[CrazyYoshimitsu]

Thanks Psylodice, I needed a decent laugh after another shitty day at School. I swear I feel like my class is full of smartasses and retards. Aside from a couple of my friends.

 

[Impending_Doom66]

I swear I feel like my class is full of smartasses and retards.

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